23.2.08

THE KISS

Well, I kno I wasn't supposed to post anything new till I'm over with my exams... but...

Actually, I have this irksome habit of writing anything just about anywhere! And precisely coz of this, i have lost quite a few of my 'k'reations.. wrote 'em on whatever was available at that tym.. n then forgot all about it!

But this creation here didn't end up (like all the others) in the trash only coz i chose my chemistry (well! thats wat m sposd to be studying, since its the first xam!) register and (boo hoo!!) wen my sir opened it... well.. u can very well guess now.. this is the first thing he came across and then...

I dont think there's any need to say further..!

just read it.. and ull know...!!







Beside the moonlit river,
In the dead of the night,
Locked in his embrace,
Her world seems so bright,

She looks like a dream,
He- A heavenly respite.
Together they stand,
A symbol of everlasting love,

She turned to face him,
Her lips parted slightly,
Yet she just stood there,
A soft petal- Ever so naive.


She smiled slightly,
And he responded,
Should I? Or should I not?'
He didn't move, just pondered,
Then he crossed the threshold,
And she surrendered!


She could feel his breath,
Her hands in his,
The world had come to a halt,
They could feel eternal bliss,
The river was silent, and so were the birds,
Looking elsewhere and giving it a miss,
This was their 'moment'!
As they became one in THE KISS!!!

14 comments:

Aupsy-The cOOlest One!! said...

whoa!!!look at u!!! Ur'e hopelessly in love...and to describe it in such a cute way...simply amazing...i wish i could articulate my first kiss as well as u did!!!
Simply amazing...u've got me wistfully wondering,and inspired to write a new post!! If only...i had time!! lol ;)

Kriti said...

*bli nk blink*

*blush*
*blink*

hehe.. thnx ayush..
bt.. dis poem ds not describe my first kis.. (plzzz.. dont mk it too prsnl..)

but yes, its definitely a kiss i fantasize about..
u kno.. full-monn.. by the riverside... all dat mills & boon stuff!!

thnxx...
i need da appreciation anyways..
keeps me going .. u kno..
willl post more now.. evn b/w xams..
:)
tk care

The Wanderer said...

your teacher read THAT??

now he knows for sure which subject you are gonna top.. lolz
very.. dunno the right words.. very tantalizing?? not the correct word.. but somewhere around..
Good Work!
and Good Luck for the exams.. :)
(You'll need it if This is what you r thinking about.. lolz)

Kriti said...

@nishi

tantalizing??
hmm..


well.. i am sposd to be studying chemistry.. n well.. in a way, i AM studying chemistry.. aint i?
its just dat its a different kinda chemistry..!!

hehe..

n yes! i sure do need luck! loads of it...!!!
thnx a lot dear .. keep visiting

priyankascribe said...

well done!! the poem was simple yet i could strong emotions... hmm great going!! but now concentrate on ur exams
:P
all the best and keep the ink flowing

Kriti said...

@priyanka di..

thnx di..

ashish said...

abt dis poem ---its amazing........
waise i knw how was ur frst kiss better den u..... am i ryt????? anyway good luck for ur exams

Kriti said...

@ashish..



hmmmmmmmmmm.................

Princess Consuela Banana Hammock said...

hey again .... thats really beautiful .... just the right amount of chemistry to keep me hooked ....
it just amazes me the extent we are similar .... i have been in love with enrique for years ....
and i have a bad habit of writing poems anywhere and everywhere .... its crazy .... my accounts teacher discovered one of mine at the back of the register too .... but i quickly closed and pulled the page out ....

anyways lots of best wishes for the math exam ..... !!!!!

Unknown said...

waise i gave u my comments on fone...writin coz u forced me to...my first reaction to this peom was...wow!!!
it was as if i was readin some poem from our english text book...which some classis poet had written,....beautiful

Unknown said...

waise i gave u my comments on fone...writin coz u forced me to...my first reaction to this peom was...wow!!!
it was as if i was readin some poem from our english text book...which some classis poet had written,....beautiful

Kriti said...

ek hi comment do baar!!

ab itni bhi achhi poem nahi hai!! lol.
n waise.. wat was the need of mentioning that i forced u??


aaj tak walon ko bula ke live telelcast karwa diya jaye kya.. that i 'forced' u!

Unknown said...

log publicity ke liye kya kya karte hain lolzz....

Kriti said...

hmm..

just noticed it..
since wen hav u necome priyanAka instead of priyanka????

n agar naam change hi karna tha toh priya-na-kha wudve suited u betr.. wotsay??